Persuasive writing and reflection

I’m Bringing Bikes Back!

I believe that we should be able to bring our motorbikes to school. We can’t at the moment, isn’t that outrageous! Come on why can’t we? We’ll be safe. We could do it on our cross country course. Safe as bro!

One reason I think we should be allowed to bring our bikes because riding motorbikes are fun. Haven’t you felt the cool breeze in your hair before? And Lunch breaks are boring, I just can’t take it anymore! Seriously! Our parks have gone pretty boring. Can you stand us being bored out our brains! And we’ll be getting adrenaline in the process so it would be the best thing in school!

Another reason why is because it will be safe and it will be away from everyone because we will ask if we could use the paddock and we will be wearing helmets and protective gear etc. See, like I said safe as bro! And the only people that know how to drive will be able to ride them. We will die from boredom.

    

Therefore, in summary I think we should be able to bring our motorbikes to school because they are fun and we will be safe. I’m bringing bikes back! Brm Brm Brm Brm Brm de Brm de Brm.

What I did well

I used the language feature rhetorical questions to hook/engage with the audience.

I used language features such as emotive language to make my reader feel emotion, I used some rhetorical questions, I used figurative language and I used great connectives and I structured my work well.

What I can do to try improve my persuasive writing

Try use facts to support my argument and use more supporting detail.

Number Line Reversibility

New Kapahaka Design.

W.A.L.T create a new design for our Kapahaka uniform that represents us.  This is one I created. 

My te reo maori learning so far

Today I learnt about 4 different videoing shots and their purpose

This term in writing I have been learning about persuasive writing.

Kia ora, this term in writing I have been learning about persuasive writing. I have learnt that the purpose of persuasive writing is to change someones mind about something.

I have also learnt about the structure of persuasive writing. This is how you organise your ideas for persuasive writing. First you need your introduction with your subject that you want to persuade someone. Then your first main reason with supporting detail. Then you need your second main idea with some more supporting detail and you end with a summary about your main ideas.

WALT think about the purpose and audience of our recount and create a success criteria that suits our purpose

On Saturday in the first week of the July holidays me, my mum and dad were going to Auckland because me and my dad were catching a plane to Christchurch. We had just had a three day long storm and it had just finished.

Later that same day….

We got stopped because the dirty and murky flood had went all over Mangakahia road. A little while later, a big Toll truck came and then my dad walked in front of the big truck to help it get through. And a little Toyota (tried) to follow the Toll truck. But, unfortunately with his eight month pregnant wife, the Toyota drowned. The Toll truck got through and carried on. In the end we had to tow him out. When my dad got out of the murky and dirty flood, we turned around, went back home and my dad had a shower.

After my dad had a shower we tried the Moerewa way. But….. We got stopped again by the police at the top of the Moerewa hill. “Where are you going today?” asked the policeman “Auckland” replied my dad “nah, not today, maybe not even for weeks. There’s a big slip on SH1. Yeah, took out ¾ of the road.’’ said the policeman. Was our flight to Christchurch over? Was it? We’ll just have to wait and see I suppose. “Nah, just dropping this fella off in Moerewa” my dad said. Because we had just picked up this man up off the side of the road.

After we dropped the man off at his house we went through Kawakawa and onto SH1. But we got stopped again because the road was blocked. “Nah can’t go past here because there’s a big slip at the bottom of the hill.” Said the policeman. Was our flight really over? Hopefully not.

So, after that we tried the Mangakahia way again. The water was still over the road but we could get through that part that was too deep before but the next part was too deep, so we tried the Dargaville back road and that was a miracle. Guess why. It worked!! Whew, our flight wasn’t over. Thank God for the backroads.

I will never forget the hustle and bustle of that day, or the feelings. It was cool on Air New Zealand because you get free stuff.

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